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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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act that possessing a
house
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 in many nations
such
 as Vietnam.
This
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ositive phenomenon, which are shed some light in the essay. The main reason causing to own a home is that a
house
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vailable property. Due to
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imitation of land area, the price of
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ouse is expected to increase in the
furture
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future
culture
. Backing to the 10
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 ago, if someone bought
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 apartment at one billion VND, they could have
sell
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 that at two billion VND in
this
 time.
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possess
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 of
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 apartment helps the owner a space for living and saving life cost due to the percentage of renting fee account for 25% of total expenditure normally.
Finally
, it is
also
 the best solution that most parent heritage for their decent when they become older or past to heaven.
Although
 choosing renting
house
 make people have more choice where they live and feel convenient when they face to
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ig change in their life
such
 as getting a new job, married or having a baby, but it
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 with wasting money and time.
For instance
, when the
house
 lenders suddenly want to break their contract, they will be inactive to find a new
house
 and suffer from changing their scheme like which school their kid study. In conclusion, from
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bove explanations, I suppose that the need
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 houses should be encouraged aim to motivate people buying it alternatively renting in
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ong- term.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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