IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognized as increasing numbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity? Why is species loss occurring? What is the potential effect of this?

#importance #biodiversity #numbers #species #threat #loss #effect
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
An increasing concern for many people around the world is that the number of
plants
 and
animals
 which have become extinct has increased greatly. The causes of
this
 phenomenon are varied and have led to a wide range of effects on human life. In
this
essay
Add a comma
essay,
show examples
 I will examine the reasons why species loss is occurring and discuss the results it can have on people and the world. From an
overall
 perspective, there are two main reasons why various numbers of species come under threat.
Firstly
, the primary cause of
this
 phenomenon is deforestation and illegal logging.
This
 is
due to
 an enormous demand for land for urbanization which has resulted in the loss of habitat for wild
animals
 and
plants
.
Secondly
, biotelemetry can
also
 be negatively affected by pollution.
For example
, emissions from vehicles, factories and industrial wastage contribute to global warming, which in turn leads to the destruction of
animals
 and
plants
. The results of species loss are numerous and potentially serious. Perhaps the most serious consequence is that
plants
 are a valuable source of medicine. If we lose these medicines, we will not be able to cure or treat many complex diseases. A second consequence is that the food chain can be affected. In conclusion, the extinction of
plants
 and
animals
 is an issue which will continue to be demanded in the foreseeable future. If the government and individuals do not work together to solve
this
 problem, the well-being of our future generation will be in danger.
Submitted by polash.kahari on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Make sure that your main points are fully developed with specific examples and elaboration. Each cause and effect should be discussed thoroughly to ensure clarity and depth of analysis.
coherence and cohesion
While you have a logical structure, aim to improve the transition between ideas with smoother linking words and phrases. This enhances the flow and clarity of your arguments.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: