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It is becoming increasingly expensive for museums to be open to the public. What would be the best solution to keep them open in your opinion

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Historical houses demand a high budget revenue
on
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its
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 renovation and restoration of
the
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prestige
artifacts
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.So it is quite hard for them to provide free exposure to
mases
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masses
mass
.
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,there are some measures
dicussed
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discussed
 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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dissertion
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dissertation
 which
i
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 believe can be really helpful to provide
free
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ticket
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tickets
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 for people to experience history. To commence, the most prominent reason for
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 trend is the mammoth expenditure on
musems
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museums
 and
that is
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 why the authorities find
difficult
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it difficult
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 to raise the budget for
proper
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 ongoing of
such
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 places.
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, funds should be raised by
government
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the government
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 for the repair cost of ancesrtorical buildings,
this
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 can be done by : making
populace
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the populace
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 aware
about
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of
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historical
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history
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 and by managing
ceratin
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certain
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instituonial
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institutional
 trips to the
muesems
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museums
museum
.
Consquently
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Consequently
, if people are aware
about
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 the pivotal role of history they will tend to donate; if students
will
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join the expedition not only they will know about the crucial past but the tour fees can be given to
infratstructer
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infrastructure
 owners for
a
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sound regulation.
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, less
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the
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debt
on
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in
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 these places
more
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and more
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 are the chances for
public
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the public
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 to experience
for
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them for
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 free.
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 one of the obstructive
effect
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effects
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 is ,
demand
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the demand
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 for fees by keepers of heritage so the question arises ,
wheteher
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whether
 the fund should be used on cultural products or on
the
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workers
?.
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Perhaps, both
requires
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 a substantial fund, and for proper
balance
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 certain taxes can be imposed on the tourists
for giving
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to give
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the
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them
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 priceless cultural and traditional knowledge.
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,
recently
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a recently
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 opened partition
muesem
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museum
 in Amritsar demands
for
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100
rippes
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recipes
 for a
foriengner
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foreigner
 and the rate for locals are only 20 rupees.
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, some measure of taxing can be followed on outsiders but not on nearby
residence
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residents
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beacuse
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because
 they are rightful proponents for
there
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their
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ansectors
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ancestors
sectors
 role in the past. To summarize, denizens
truily
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truly
 deserve a free pass to historical buildings
this
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 will really pivotal for nations development.
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, every single effort must be made by regimes
as well as
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 by individuals to support the museums

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Task Achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the issues and solutions you plan to discuss in a straightforward manner. This helps set the reader's expectations for what follows.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical correctness and spelling to improve the clarity of your writing. For example, 'mases' should be 'masses', and 'infratstructer' should be 'infrastructure'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to provide clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph. This will help guide the reader through your argument more effectively and strengthen the logical structure of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to connect your ideas smoothly with appropriate transition words or phrases. This improves flow and helps maintain reader engagement.
Task Achievement
Consider revising your conclusion to clearly restate your main arguments and summarize the importance of providing access to historical buildings.
Task Achievement
You have demonstrated a thoughtful understanding of the issue regarding museum accessibility and funding.
Task Achievement
Your essay presents a range of solutions to the problem, showing critical thinking in your responses.
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