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Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of the improvement in the standard of living. To what degree do you agree or disagree with this position?

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It is often believed that the improvement in the standard of living of people is one of the major causes of damaging the
environment
. In my opinion, I completely agree that advancement to ensure that people have a decent
lifestyle
 is a major reason leading to environmental destruction.
Firstly
, a good reason leading to environmental damage is the increase in construction by cutting down trees.
In other words
, due to increasing demands of the people for connecting roads, railways, malls, and other infrastructural properties leading to an increase in deforestation. As more and more people demand a decent
lifestyle
 when it comes to their accommodation, travelling, and other basics of life. Rajasthan, in India, is one of the prime examples as the city was rich in natural resources, but in order to meet the demands of its people, the country is left with nothing more than barren lands.
Secondly
, the use of advanced machinery as a means of luxury by the current generation, leading to a heavy penalty paid by the
environment
. Even though the advancement of technology has provided one with a comfortable
lifestyle
, it has caused massive damage to the
environment
 around us.
For instance
, with the increase in the use of air-conditioners, there has been a release of toxic gases in the air which are harmful not only for the
environment
 but
also
 by humans.
Moreover
, there is no focus currently on the sustainable use of resources. In conclusion, in order to ensure a comfortable
lifestyle
 for humans, we are compromising on the health of our
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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