SOME STUDENTS GO DIRECTLY TO UNIVERSITY OR COLLEGE AFTER HIGHSCHOOL WHILE OTHERS TAKE A GAP YEAR TO WORK OR TRAVEL. DISCUSS AND SAY WHICH YOU PREFER

#students #university #college #highschool #gap #year #work #travel

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

WHILE THERE ARE MANY STUDENTS WHO CHOOSE GOING STRAIGHT AHEAD TO UNDERGRADUATE PROGRAM AFTER SCHOOL

TIME

, THERE ARE

ALSO

THOSE ONES WHO WOULD RATHER MAKE A DIFFERENT CHOICE AND SPEND SOME

TIME

GETTING INTO ANOTHER PROJECT. I WOULD DISCUSS BOTH SIDES OF THE ARGUMENT BUT I WOULD SUPPORT MY OPINION ON THE LATTER TOPIC.

FIRST

AND FOREMOST I WOULD SAY THERE IS NO

FURTHER

REASON TO BE IN A RUSH ABOUT UNDERGRADUATE. IT SEEMS TO BE USEFUL HAVING A

TIME

FOCUSED IN

ANOTHER PURPOSES

Replace the adjective

ANOTHER purpose

other PURPOSES

show examples

BESIDES

THE PROFESSIONALS CENTRAL AIMS. TO ILLUSTRATE

THIS

POINT I COULD SAY SOMEONE WHO

CHOOSE

Change the verb form

chooses

show examples

SPENDING A

TIME

IN ANOTHER COUNTRY LEARNING A

SECOND

LANGUAGE WOULD BE GRACED WITN AN UNIQUE

OPORTUNITY

Correct your spelling

OPPORTUNITY

. AS A CONSEQUENCE,

THIS

PERSON WOULD FIND OUT A SPECIAL SPOT ON MARKET PLACE AFTER

THIS

FOREIGN EXPERIENCE.

HOWEVER

Add a comma

show examples

THERE ARE THOSE PEOPLE WHO CONCENTRATE EFFORTS TO CONCLUDE FASTER THEIR FORMATION. THE REASON FOR

THIS

COULD BE FINANCIAL NEEDS. SOME PEOPLE HAVE NO MONEY SUPPORT TO INVEST TOO MUCH

TIME

IN THEIR CAREERS AS STUDENTS AND

SEEMS

Change the verb form

seem

show examples

TO NEED TO HURRY UP TO GET INTO MARKET PLACE AS SOON AS POSSIBLE. THE RESULT OF

THIS

WOULD BE NO

FURTHER

PLANS

BESIDES

UNDERGRADUATION AND MARKET PLACE DIRECTLY. AS A CONCLUSION, I WOULD RESPECT BOTH OPINION BUT I WOULD SAY THERE IS NO SPENT

TIME

ON LIFE WHILE ONES ARE INVESTING ON THEIR OWN PERSONAL GROWTH. AS

MUCH

Change the quantifier

many

show examples

UNIQUE OPPORTUNITIES ONE HAVE, AS MUCH WELL-TO-DO ONE WOULD BE TO GRAB/FIND WORK MARKET CHANCES.

Submitted by agenciabrushup on Tue Sep 29 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

248 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5.5
band
You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include •Where you stayed •What the problems were •How they can fix your complaints
I am writing to complain about the room in your room because there were a lot of problems in the room .
8
band
Technology has brought many benefits to people, however, some elderly have difficult using technology. What are the possible benefits of technology for the elderly population and how can they be encouraged to use it. Give answers and explainations to support your opion.
Although technological development has brought numerous advantages to the public, seldom senior citizens are unable to use it. These citizens can increase their productivity; and hence, stay healthy by connecting with loved ones, with the help of technology. Further, to encourage the elderly population to take advantage of this evolution, campaigns should be conducted to educate them about the proper usage of applications.
6.5
band
Cultures around the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?
As humanity continues to progress in terms of technology, ideas, travel, and communication, it is observed that cultures in different places are gradually becoming similar. This is attributed to the influence of social media, from highly developed countries to underdeveloped ones. The merging of cultures is a negative trend because it takes away cultural diversity.
5
band
Innovation is often driven by the pursuit of profit and economic growth. However, some argue that innovation should be targeted towards addressing social and environmental issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
There is no denying the fact that tochnological revolution has puesuit widerange. While it is a commonly held belief that the purposes of innovation are achiving profit and economic growth , there is also an argument say that the main target should be in order to solving social and environmental problems. This essay will analyse this topic from both points of view and express my opinion.
6
band
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry payment and land. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?
It is an irrefutable fact that, in the contemporary world, agriculture plays a crucial role in the survival of individuals. Although, in the present world lot of methods are used to increase the land production capacity, many people around the world still face hunger. Such a trend, brings about various issues, which demand immediate consideration. This essay will analyze the reasons and the solutions for this trend along with examples in upcoming paragraphs.

SOME STUDENTS GO DIRECTLY TO UNIVERSITY OR COLLEGE AFTER HIGHSCHOOL WHILE OTHERS TAKE A GAP YEAR TO WORK OR TRAVEL. DISCUSS AND SAY WHICH YOU PREFER

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include •Where you stayed •What the problems were •How they can fix your complaints

Technology has brought many benefits to people, however, some elderly have difficult using technology. What are the possible benefits of technology for the elderly population and how can they be encouraged to use it. Give answers and explainations to support your opion.

Cultures around the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?

Innovation is often driven by the pursuit of profit and economic growth. However, some argue that innovation should be targeted towards addressing social and environmental issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry payment and land. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?