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Nowadays tourist are visiting one place to another places. However, people think that tourist should adopt the other cultureof country where they are visiting do you agree or disagree

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It has become the moot issue whether the globetrotters should embrace the culture of the hosting country or they should only follow their native beliefs?
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, different masses have different mindsets. I accord myself to a large extent to the assertion. The following paragraphs will shed light on the statement and correspondingly, highlight my opinion in the conclusion. To Start the deliberation, there are myriad of things that can be favoured the statement. The tenable aetiology is a traveller visit every part of the world to explore the unfamiliar lifestyle,traditions, sightseeing, knowledge. When in roman, do like Romans" it will help tourists to blend with local residents in order to learn their cultural beliefs.
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, they will get enormous support and respect from the local people.
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, pilgrims going every year for Hajj the sacred city of mecca in Saudi Arabia. Throughout Holiplace you are expected to remove signs of wealth or class distinctions by replacing your clothing with simple white garments. These pieces are called 'ihram clothing.
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, Even though, local provincial can guide them when they speak their language and regards their values, food. 
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, despite having things in the favour of adopting a way of life of locals by explorer.
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, there are few things which cannot be possible for sight seeker to espouse. To exemplify, there are some indigenous tribes in Africa, they have their own customs and values which is quite a mind-boggling for travellers to follow
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 as , their eating habits, dressing style and piercing the various part of the body especially ears. Bone ,horn, wood, and stone were generally carved for ear stretching.
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, it is always not a favourable idea of acquiring the customs and rituals of hosting country. To recapitulate, culture immersion would definitely help visitors in unfamiliar circumstances and places.
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, when tourist gets along with locals,they know them very closely. Whereas, in certain situations where globetrotters are uncomfortable
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 its obligation of the community to feel them cogenial irrespective of knowing the language barrier or other discomforts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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