some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding while other think it is a wastage of time what is our opinion

Grand marriage
functions
are common in recent times. Investing a large bulk of buck in a wedding is essential, as
people
are spending
this
investment once in their lifetime;
however
, it is not in reach for middle and lower-class
people
as they will not be able to spend a huge amount of capital on these
functions
.
This
essay will discuss , why
people
spend huge capital on wedding
functions
and
it's
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implications. On the one hand, big marriage
functions
will force the family to showcase their prestige to the guests who attend the occasion.
People
eager
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to spend more
fund
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funds
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because they want guests to be very happy with the arrangement and enjoy the occasion.
For example
, as per a news article, Millions of pounds
spent
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on
London
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Prince
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wedding a couple of years ago.
This
is because it is a Royal family and wants to make the
Prince
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wedding very grand and successful.
On the other hand
,
People
spend more money on decorations, gifts and
meal
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. As the material and ingredient price is increasing nowadays,
family
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forced to give a large amount to catering services
who
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supply the food. As per a recent survey,
in
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royal weddings, 60% of foodstuff will remain unconsumed and thrown
to
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a garbage bin.
This
will not give any value to the wealth which
people
spends
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. Because of these reasons, many think that spending a large amount of money on
this
kind of grand
functions
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is a waste.
As per
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my opinion, it is good to spend a reasonable investment
in
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on
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wedding
functions
and try to avoid unnecessary wastage of wealth. And
also
, it depends on the
family
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monetary capacity on how much
fund
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funds
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they want to send
on
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these
functions
. Proper planning and proper budgeting will help very much before conducting these
functions
.
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task response
Task Response: Ensure that the essay clearly states and supports the opinion on spending lots of money on large weddings. Make sure to present a clear stance and maintain focus on the given topic throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: Work on creating stronger connections between ideas and paragraphs. Use linking words and transition phrases to improve the flow of the essay. Ensure that each paragraph serves a clear purpose and contributes to the overall coherence of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extravagance
  • financial strain
  • nuptial
  • matrimony
  • opulence
  • frugality
  • sustainability
  • intimacy
  • lavish
  • commemorate
  • milestone
  • festivities
  • budgeting
  • investment
  • societal norms
  • materialistic
  • minimalism
  • consumerism
  • practical considerations
  • economic implications
  • memory-making
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