Many schools these days have problems with poor student behavior. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done to tackle these problems?

Nowadays, teachers complain about misbehaving
students
in the school. Some people see that
parents
and
environment
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play an important role.
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for poor student behaviour. One reason for student behaviour is social communication.
In other words
, many kids communicate with strangers in video games and social media.
For example
, in our community, there are kids
that
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spend a lot of hours on video games that provide voice chat with different players without parental control. One possible solution is educating
parents
about the danger of communicating in video games. As
such
,
school
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maybe
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may
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organize a lecture to the
parents
about it. Another cause is the environment of the person at his home.
That is
, family attitude will
effect
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on
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its members.
For instance
, if at a house they used to shout
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each other, it will encourage
to
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them to
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poor
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behave with everyone the same. To tackle
this
problem propose
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TV Shows to aim at
this
issue. The result of
this
would awareness the families to focus on improving their attitude. The
last
reason is punishing bad
students
has changed from the old days.
This
means teachers have no validity to chasten
students
that
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have poor manners. To illustrate, if there
was
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a boy in the class that behaves badly,
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cannot penalize them because the parent may be displeased
from
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it. To tackle
this
problem
parents
must give some authority to misters.
Consequently
,
students
will follow the rules. In conclusion, every
reasoning
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for poor student behaviour must
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a solution. Social communication, environments and
punish
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punishment
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changed from the old days.
Therefore
, it is important for
parents
to concentrate on their
children
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children's
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attitude.
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