Some people think personal happiness is closely related to economic success, while others believe that it depends on other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that people who have much
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feel happy while other people believe that there are many other elements which affect personal happiness. In my opinion
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statement On the one hand, some people believe that the happiness of people
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high income because of many reasons.
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, people can buy whatever they want. people can have a better
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if they can buy anything they want.
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, you can never feel hungry if you have a lot of
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to buy food.
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, thanks to
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, people can develop themselves.
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, a student in Vietnam with a lot of
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can go to America to learn in the best schools so that he can graduate and get a really good job with
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ven higher salary.
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, there is a popular thought that people feel happier that rely on other factors because of several causes. The
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point is that family relationships are very important to everyone. Because of that, when you are in a difficult situation,
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amily can always help you no matter what, especially no matter how much
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you have. The
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point is that
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is something that
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can’t buy. Because nothing can buy
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, people have to use their
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in the best way possible.
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, if a person has a lot of
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, he may spend all of his
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playing and partying which results in wasting his whole
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without achieving anything. Overall, many agree that
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is the key to happiness because people can purchase anything, and they can use
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oney to develop themselves, while other think that family and
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important to a happy
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. In my opinion, I think that there are many aspects
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a happy
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