5. Public celebrations (such as national days, festivals etc) are held in most countries. These are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things. Do you agree or disagree?
It is known that some public celebrations engage millions of people around the globe. While some defend that they are there are millions of people living below the poverty line, but every single year we have the Carnival and São João festivals, which normally are extremely expensive. As a consequence, the country's culture remains alive but
part
of traditions and culture, others think the government should not spend much money on them, due to other things more relevant and important that are left aside. I strongly agree with the latter point of view and in this
essay, I will support that view with some examples.
One of the main drawbacks about national festivals is the amount of money regarded to them. While a significant part
of society may not have access to basic needs such
as clean water or electricity, specially
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especially
third
-world countries, some of their governors keep investing in big cultural celebrations. To illustrate this
, in BrazilAdd a comma
,
part
of its population keeps living in bad conditions, which does not seem to be a reasonable trade-off.
Another point to be considered is the image some governments try to create by running large public celebrations. Although
it may be known by them that there could exist many other important things needing more urgent investment, some politicians seem to wonder that their reputation can increase if they set up big festivals. For instance
, some Brazilian authorities may care less about reducing the number of people living on the streets than how many individuals attend their celebrations. As a consequence, the population can keep enjoying public cultural celebrations while some structural problems such
as bad public transportation and the lack of hospitals would keep being part
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite