Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

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We are living in

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odern world. Where people are enjoying virtual

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compare to real

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. There are many people

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elieve that social networking sites have

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uge negative impact on both individuals and society. As per my view, yes, they have

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effect of social networking.

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, what they impact on people

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evidence shows that 90%

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people in the world using a site and give there 100% trust on information they see into it.

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give

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chance to bad people to prove their point and curve the people thinking to there

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ite to manipulate young persons and they

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brain wash

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. The youngsters are ready to do dangers attack, without thinking about

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china started the rehabilitation

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to stop

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roup to used internet because there so much addicted

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but not least, in japan the new trend started that people who are failed into

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ife of fade up with

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. they lock tey self into

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oom. They used the internet to survive. They cannot come

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is stop development of

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, there some benefits of social networking. They can make

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ew friend into

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ntire world.Getting knowledge about cultural difference and respect those. There are many sites where you can exchange information about

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nasa

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post news about their work and reply the audience question. In a nutshell, The social network idea was to know

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erson far away from you. But , every coin has two

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side

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your main idea and the dark

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becomes heavy. So, they have to improve the base. The government and family have to eye on social networking to stop negative impact on society.

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Topic Vocabulary:

erosion
face-to-face
interactions
privacy concerns
data breaches
misinformation
polarize
cyberbullying
online harassment
procrastination
productivity
social isolation
dissemination
breeding ground
vast amounts
personal information
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