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Some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence whilst others think that intelligent can be measured in other ways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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According to some people, intelligence can only be measured through ones'
success
, while others believe there are other means of doing so. In my opinion,
success
 can be a measure of intelligence. Throughout life, people are faced with different choices. It is their appropriate choices that make them successful in life. Intelligent people are often the ones making the right choices in life.
For instance
, students who follow a regular study schedule are often more successful academically. It is their choice to study regularly that makes them achieve
success
. Another measure of
success
 is how much someone is worth financially. People gain wealth by making sound financial choices and it is mostly the intelligent people who often end up making most of these right decisions.
For example
, Watten Buffet sold most of his shares in the newspaper industry at the early 2000s and invested on online media which later turned out the be the
next
 generation medium of news. It is his intelligence that made him foresee the shift in the industry and take an early decision to shift gear and move into online media.
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