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Some people believe that cell phones have a negative effect on social lives. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, the advancement of
technology
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 of mobile phone and cells phones, most people think that the physical interaction between humans has affected and people are avoided for physical meetings.
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 of many people are love to connect by
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. I completely agree with the above notion.
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 with, nowadays social distance are increasing day by day, the reason is everybody is moved toward new places for their better lifestyles, in that case, they are unable to attend social activities and it is
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 difficult with their family and friends.
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, the usage of mobile devices is increased for connecting the world.
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, according to a survey of the Jazz telecom company, in a recent decade, it has been increasing the number of calls and messages as compared to
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ast decade. It means the usage of mobile phone has increased for socializing.
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, with the enhancement of
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, there are numerous mobile applications, that can be used for connecting people, even they live far away from people.
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 as using The Facebook app to connecting their friends and family members as wells making new friends.
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, there are various apps for messaging, calling and even video calling and group chats
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.
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, it is to get in touch with families and other people in
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echnology of communication and socializing is more convenient. I think the usage of mobile phone has to give positivity among humans while it is the easiest way to world by modern devices.
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