We can see more disasters and violence show on TV What are its cause and what effects will they exert on the individual and the society

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Television is
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of best invention of human life.
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people to knowledge to
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ntire world with news, They can connect with different culture with
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ot topic in the world that how they will cause and effects individual and society.
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are no restrictions about age, cannot excess
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kind of tv shows.
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ame of thrones is
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opular shows of American television history. But, shows contain lots of harsh scenes into it. It is base on family fighting for thorne or power.
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hild that it is right to fight with anybody to fulfil or desire. There would indicate
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hild could be more aggressive in future.
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, it is shown by every age of
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roup and it would change people behaviour. The reason behind it, the research shows that
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uman mind is trust visuals even it
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.
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, when people see fighting scene on tv, 80%
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people are getting energies from that and ready to show that power to others. Teenagers are more aggressive at that time.
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news that
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group of teens are trying to break a
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after watching
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of their
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got electric shocked by that.
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ong time, people still watching
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same kind of shows
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would be short term angry, less emotional and physically ready to fight. In a nutshell, Violence shows are affected many people minds, especially on
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children and children is our future. There would have pottensinol to change our future. So, we have to care full about watching shows and it good for children or not. if it is not, it would be doing not shown to them.
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