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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Medical studies have shown that smoking not only
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moker
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 people afflict passive smokers.
As a result
, many believe that smoking should be prohibited in populated areas.
Although
 there are arguments on both side, I opine that forbidding people to smoke in
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ost appropriate course of action. Smoking, that has taken more lives than we have ever thought, that can cause severe diseases like cancer of lungs, mouth and throat. It works as a stress reliever for temporary but it has lead millions of people to distress and anxiety.
Moreover
, there has been evident medical proofs that clearly mentions that passive smoking is equally dangerous as active smoking.
Thus
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 smoker
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 may cause detrimental health effects to everyone. A typical example, statistics
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 that 67
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 of smoker perish from
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 illness.
In addition
, If public smoking is banned, people will not be able to smoke in work areas or roads.
As a result
, they may reduce their nicotine intake as they do not have
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ption to smoke while working or walking.
In addition
, children’s mind
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ost innocent
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, they always imitate whatever their elders are doing.
Such
 that, in case of banning public smoking they will not see much smokers unless there is
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 in their home, that will reduce
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uture smoking population.
However
, bars and pubs would suffer or may go out of business due to
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 customers.
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, few people consider smoking as
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atter of freedom of choice, and enforcing
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 law might cause disruption in their mindset. In conclusion, No business is above
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ealth of people.
Such
 that making smoking illegal in public only brings benefits.
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