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Band 4.5

You recently organized an event that was mentioned in a newspaper article. The article had some incorrect information about the event. Write a letter to the newspaper editor and include the following in your letter: – When and where the article was published – What information in the article was wrong – How you expect the editor to correct the error

Dear Sir/Madam, I like to read your newspapers as often as I can because of the objective news and informative articles you try to publish
it
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. But, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that the article you wrote on
award
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the award
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 function, published on the front page on
2nd
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the 2nd
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 of September, unfortunately,
it
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has some wrong information. In that piece,
It
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 was written that a famous actor
who
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was attending an award ceremony for addressing issues
of
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in
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Industry
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the Industry
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. In fact, during that time, I watched the entire event on
live-telecasting
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live telecast
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 and did not miss his speech on problems. But,
this
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 piece mentioned information that he was talking about aco-actors and there was
war
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a war
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 between top artists.
Also
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, his speech would encourage young artists to become
a
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good
artist
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artists
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. So, as you know the truth now, please take appropriate actions to correct the mistake
either
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, either
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 by writing a follow-up piece or by publishing
editorial
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an editorial
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 correction, whichever you deem fit. Thank you for your attention and consideration. Yours faithfully, Sunil Kumar Chandaluri

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task response
Your letter has a clear aim to ask for a correction. To show this, name the exact error and the page or date where it appears.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a good order. Start with the wrong fact, then say what is correct, then say how you want the editor to fix it.
coherence and cohesion
Try one idea in each paragraph. If you have more ideas, add a new paragraph.
tone
Keep a calm and formal tone. Use plain words. Check your grammar.
task response
Say all parts asked: when and where the article was published, what is wrong, and how you want it changed.
tone
The letter shows a polite tone.
content
The letter states the main aim to seek correction.
structure
The closing is clear and proper.
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