In many countries, paying for things using mobile phones (cellphones) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

It is indeed true that in today's world, cell phones are immensely doing
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whether it is to contact near and dear ones, to pay bills or so on. Without mobile phones,
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human beings
cannot be survived. In
this
contemporary world, people are using it in every day's life and its popularity is rising all over the world.
However
, it is ubiquitous amongst users to use it for paying the bills and it has some
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positive
aspects but we cannot
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its negative sides too. On the one hand, Nowadays, the trend of making online payments through mobile apps is
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commonly seen because it is more convenient and
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.
For example
, products can be by online and to pay right away for those items.
In addition
, Since people do not worry to go to banks and carry the massive cash to pay the mortgages
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. It is
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an easy method for the individuals that are working
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a considerable amount of time and energy to do other important things.
On the other hand
, despite all the advantages of using e-payments, it is an
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arduous
ardour
for the people that are in their golden years because they are quite not familiar with the modern appliances, So they prefer orthodox methods to pay for everything.
Furthermore
, In some situations, users are
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prerequisite
prerequisites
to share their personal information with the
third
party to make transactions online using
such
cellphone apps and It is often seen that in many cases, the data is leaked by the fake apps and it is probably shared with hackers. So, in
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security is a big concern as
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to secure personal details.
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, every problem has
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olution. Many of the agencies are
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continuously
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being working on
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matter to save the information for
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ata breach. In conclusion, albeit, phone applications have some disadvantages, its advantages are far more which adds to the
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convenience
level for people. Due to
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, it is considered as a predominant factor across the poor and wealthier nations.
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