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Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion

#educaiton #people #backgrounds #levels #school #education
The primary reason is to disagree is that
this
 would result
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serious financial crisis in the nations, where
this
 implemented.
This
 is because many students may
enroll
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 in various courses since it is free of cost and they can escape from doing any jobs and, eventually, they strain in the economy hugely.
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, poverty-stricken countries may experience difficulties and, they could not focus
much needed
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 area when they
channalise
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channelise
channelised
money
 for
offereing
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offering
 free education till graduate level,
this
 cannot be justified. Another factor is here that students with even poor academic background may join the colleges,
instead
 of searching
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jobs. In
otther
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other
 words,
this
 scenario
force
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 the
bureaurocrats
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bureaucrats
 to allocate fund for even for non-productive students. Alternatively, it would be better, if the
giffted
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gifted
 children are provided with fees
examptions
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exemptions
exemption
 and
otherwise
, the
younge
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younger
young
 generation do not appreciate the value of
thye
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the
money
 The primary reason is to disagree is that
this
 would result
Verify preposition usage
in
show examples
serious financial crisis in the nations, where
this
 implemented.
This
 is because many students may
enroll
Change the spelling
enrol
show examples
 in various courses since it is free of cost and they can escape from doing any jobs and, eventually, they strain in the economy hugely.
For example
, poverty-stricken countries may experience difficulties and, they could not focus
much needed
Add a hyphen
much-needed
show examples
 area when they
channalise
Correct your spelling
channelise
channelised
money
 for
offereing
Correct your spelling
offering
 free education till graduate level,
this
 cannot be justified. Another factor is here that students with even poor academic background may join the colleges,
instead
 of searching
Verify preposition usage
for
show examples
jobs. In
otther
Correct your spelling
other
 words,
this
 scenario
force
Change the verb form
forces
show examples
 the
bureaurocrats
Correct your spelling
bureaucrats
 to allocate fund for even for non-productive students. Alternatively, it would be better, if the
giffted
Correct your spelling
gifted
 children are provided with fees
examptions
Correct your spelling
exemptions
exemption
 and
otherwise
, the
younge
Correct your spelling
younger
young
 generation do not appreciate the value of
thye
Correct your spelling
the
money
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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