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.You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#minutes #countries #world #challenges #environment #population #education #country #face #ten #years
The entire world is undergoing
through
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burning issues like imbalance in the ecosystem, overcrowding, and problems related to the education system.
Apart from
this
,
an
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unemployment and health complications are going to influence many in the next decade. These problems could be overcome
every
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if every
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 individual
join
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 hands with
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Government, collectively we should eradicate
this difficulties
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this difficulty
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 in
upcoming
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 years
..
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 Being
overpopulated
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 country, the biggest trouble is going to
face
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faced
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 by youth is unemployment, every year thousands of student graduates from
colleges
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college
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 but there is
lack
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 of opportunities.
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, many educated people fall
in to
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doing crime to meet ends, as they don't have money even for their basic necessities.
Additionally
,
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numbers
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 of diseases
are
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 going to increase as many are following
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sedentary life and even diet habits are faulty. To exemplify,
number
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 of lifestyle diseases like Hypertension,Diabetes and Heart disease increasing nowadays as
compare
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 to earlier days. To get the better of
this
 situation,
an
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 education system
need
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 to be changed, if the youth have skill base training, they could excel in their respective field. Everyone has one another hidden potential within them.To exemplify, currently,people give importance to their academic performance rather
then
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 their skills, which is the wrong methodology and the major reason for unemployment. On
other
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 hand, to fight
with
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the burning issue of health challenges health minister should
encourage
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to do yoga and exercise to stay fit,
as well as
 follow
the
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ealty
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healthy
 diet and avoid junk food to stay fit and fine.
To conclude
, every individual
needs
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 contribute
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personal growth
as well as
 they have to give back to their society, so with
help
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the help
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 of
government
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 body take all
measure
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measures
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 to improve, we have to take charge of our life and create
a
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etter
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better
 future for the next generation.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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