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The dangers of smoking are well know, yet many people continue this habit. what are the causes of this? how can we reduce smoking in society?

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The two maps illustrate how the road access to City Hospital in 2010 is different from the road access to the hospital in 2007. There are three major roads (Ring Road, City Road and Hospital Road) that led people to the hospital. While Ring Road and City Road remained the same in both years, there are some significant changes around Hospital Road. City Road is to the south of the hospital. Taking a left from one of its ends, people could get onto HR in both the years. The junction between the
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oundabout at the junction in 2010. Ring Road is towards the north of the hospital. One one side of the road, towards the south-east, there was a bus stop that by 2010 got changed into a roundabout.
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