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The given picture gives an account of the mechanism that takes place to produce electricity in a hydroelectric power station. On the whole, there is a
reservoir
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 each on the two ends of the whole machinery, and the day or the night decides the direction of water from one to the other. Electricity is produced during the daytime. During the day, the river water collected in the high-level
reservoir
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, which is supported by a dam, flows downwards to enter the power station at the reversible turbines point. After performing its function in regard to the turbines, it
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 settles into the low-level
reservoir
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. In the daytime, the turbines operate the generator, which via power lines sends the produced electricity into the national grid. At night, the same turbines help the upward movement of water from the low-level
reservoir
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 to the high-level one.
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, it is to be noted that intake at night is closed at the high-level one. It is open during the day.
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