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Some people believe that rich countries should provide poor countries with help that is not financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #aid
Enthusiasm for providing international
support
 to the
third
 world countries
in
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 at an all-time high. Some people debate that rich nations should offer non-financial
support
 to poor nations, while the opponents do not agree with
this
 idea. Personally, I strongly advocate the former view. On the one hand, non-financial
aid
 could have a long-term impact on the countries who are in a difficult situation. Offering money can only be a temporary solution, especially for a poorer country with a developing economy. For
such
 countries, the actions in the priority list
is
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 to build an economically sound system to
support
 local developing, which needs
the
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support
 by using practical skills and specialist
knowledge
.
However
, only focusing on financial
aid
 cannot change the
knowledge
 level and technical abilities of the citizens in the impoverish countries directly.
However
, with the
aid
 of skill teaching and
knowledge
 sharing can make an enormous difference.
For example
, sharing specialist
knowledge
 about healthcare and community construction could help the people live with fundamental medical protection in poverty and prevent disease spreads rapidly in the future.
In addition
, teaching agricultural skills may reduce hunger and increase employment in poor countries.
On the other hand
, there is no doubt that offering financial
support
 to poor countries is crucial in the emergency situation,
such
 as the natural disaster and epidemic happens. Despite, it is an efficient solution for the urgent issues compared to non-financial
support
. Whereas, without non-financial
support
, the
aid
 cannot have
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ramatic effect in decades. In conclusion,
although
 providing
money
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support
 to poorer countries
are
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 simple and effective in terms of mitigating temporary effects. For the far-seeing solution, rich countries should provide non-financial
support
 to impoverished countries.
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