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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, the rate of
abortion
 has been increased tremendously which lead
this
 to a hot discussion that should
abortion
 be allowed by law?
However
, there are many people who do not support
this
 idea of making
abortion
 legal.
This
 essay will discuss both the views and at the end, I will give my opinion. Many believe that
abortion
 is not a wrong process to do and should be allowed by law. Since, there are numerous reasons for an individual to go through it,
such
 as, not ready for parenting, not financially stable to take extra responsibilities and so on.
For instance
, One of my friends, she opted for miscarriage because she was not ready to take more responsibilities and wanted to focus more on her career. On the other side, others think that making
this
 legal could lead to encouraging masses to opt it and people with wrong intentions can take benefits of
this
 law. It is medically proved that miscarriage takes a toll from the woman's body and make her weak internally.
Furthermore
, could damage the womb permanently which means she cannot be a mother later.
Besides
 it, one can opt for it after knowing the sex of child which could disbalance the gender ratio. In my country, people still prefer boys over girls so there are high chances of abortions after knowing the child's sex. In my opinion,
abortion
 should be allowed because of the aforementioned reasons but up to six weeks of pregnancy when there are fewer chances of knowing sex and
also
 it is less dangerous for women's health.
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