Public museums and art galleries are not needed because people can see historical objects and artistic works by using computers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It sometimes suggested that people can see

art

galleries and historical exhibitions by their computers and so existences of public museums and

art

galleries are not necessary. Personally, I completely agree that people can visit virtually galleries and museums when they do not have enough time for travelling to public exhibition and when they have not

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pportunity to attend it because of remoting their areas (accommodations). Seeing museums and galleries in the modern world became more difficult (unachievable) for people because of their hectic lives(schedules) and hard work. The concentration on their responsibilities reduces attendances of public museums and

art

galleries. People are able to visit exhibitions by websites from their houses(accommodations) after their work or after their businesses. To illustrate, the visiting virtual exhibitions of

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istorical Museum in Moscow has increased by half since not all people can afford to travel to Moscow. Another point to consider is that

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using

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computers for seeing historical

art

exhibitions

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more convenient for adults and children than public museums

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accessible for people who

resides

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in remote areas. There are a large

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of distance localities without developed transport infrastructures. People can not get to museums because of complicated and long travelling.

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, the visiting exhibitions by using digital devices give them golden opportunities to observe

art works

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and historical exhibits from

world famous

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museums and galleries. In conclusion, I convinced that public museums and

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galleries are do not needed, when there are websites with it.

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virtual exhibitions are more accessible for everybody. Not only is

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using computers for seeing museums and galleries

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convenient for busy people, but it is

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a great

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to visit exhibitions for people from remote areas.

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Public museums and art galleries are not needed because people can see historical objects and artistic works by using computers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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The rise of social media platforms has made easier for people to vent their frustration and complaints publicly. What are advantages and disadvantages of such a trend?

100.In many countries, the traditional family structure is changing, and an increasing number of children are being raised by single parents or by grandparents. Discuss the possible reasons for this trends and its potential consequences in society.