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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. What might this be the case? What could be the advantages if being self employed?

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These days people want to become their own owner to earn more and live freely from
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ardship of the
job
.There are various advantages as being the head of their own business.
Firstly
, in
job
 people get only a few bucks of rupees and for
this
 they have to
work
 day and night.while the company in witch
employee
work
 book a huge amount of profit but they only give salary to
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mployee.Even when
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mployee meets with some accident company during the
job
,
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ompany only provide a minor in name of compensation without bothering their family condition.suppose a person working on machine eventually his hand cheeses in
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achine and he is not able to
work
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ssociation will not compensate, they only provide
first
 aid only not bother to compensate for the whole life.
Secondly
, Their
job
 is not secure in the private sector, they have to depend upon employer grace, how many time they can remain good in the eye of the owner.At the end of spot employer future is not secure, he has to depend upon on their siblings.suppose a worker commits a mistake
however
this
 mistake happens not intionallybut
employee
 has to leave
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ask. To become an owner their business has a number of advantages like you have got a lot of free time. Money earns during the
work
 is your own. You are not responsible to anyone.you can earn lots of money. In conclusion, a number of people prefer ownership rather than do
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ob for anybody.self business gives them an ample amount of money and fame.they are not liable to answer anybody.
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