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Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

#street #shops #business #years #development
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recent years, a lot of
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small
smaller
 sized workplaces have run out of commerce. It is bad progress and
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ain cause is monopoly companies, in the essay I will highlight the drawbacks of
this
 development. People around the world rely on the procedure of
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their
governmets
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governments
government
 to ensure their rights
such
 as education and health these are known as
a social merits
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 for human life and it represents the equal life for everyone, but some business companies have
an incredible advantages
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an incredible advantage
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 all over the world.
Such
 as tax,
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liquid
 money, networks over countries. So they can move
easily
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 than
a
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a small sized store
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 stores and
this
 situation create big injustice.
for example
 Starbucks is a coffee chain and it has many branches in the country. If
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ompany decide the open new a branch on street and assume that there are local
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coffee
 shop
then
 that
coffeshop
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coffeeshop
wont
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compete
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 with Starbuck because of its price policy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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