Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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more than other important professionals but
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earning comes with
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xpensive and flashy lifestyle. Some people often
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about the amount
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sports personal
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as compare to soldiers, scientists and politicians while others advocate the notion of high wedges to athletes. In my opinion, sports personal deserve
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igher salary than other vital employees. A
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is always on national duty, they are responsible for the image of the country. They start very early in their career and made tons of sacrifices by travelling and staying away from the family. In
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has
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the
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to influence and motivate
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ass number of citizens and that makes them
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ight choice for advertisements. People who
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about the hefty earning of sportsman should know that the source of income is
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an
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ndorsement of brands not from the
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money.
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, one should not forget that the career of
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lasts for
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ery short span of time; in long run
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the amount they make is could be as equal as one scientist. It is clear that
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stars carries more responsibilities
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nations image building and acting as a role model to youth. I would conclude, that the skyrocketing salary for players is
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justifiable
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when we look at the
scarifice
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sacrifice
that they make and
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influential
they have over the citizens of the nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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