Some companies have rules that forbid employees from using personal cell phones during working hours. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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phones for their employees. I feel
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phones can cause accidents and can decrease the production of
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uses can cause accidents, injuries or another kind of disorder, both injuries and losses for
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a huge factory,
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accident or die. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of
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, one year ago, I was driving and typing a message in my
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decreasing production of
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a lot of time using
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, he can generate a delay in projects or
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delay, could generate a huge loss for
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ompany and, a terrible environment between chairman and employees. In conclusion, I strongly believe that companies must put emphasis
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rules, about the
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, many accidents can occur and the productivity can decrease.
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