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In some countries, governments encourage businesses to move outside of the cities to solve the problems of housing and transport in the cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this policy?

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The entrepreneurship trend has been accelerating.
Therefore
, the government are introducing policies to move the business setups to the urban
areas
 in order to cope with the housing
problems
 in the cities and
also
, to smoothly run businesses.
This
 trend has certain benefits and drawbacks. Moving the whole manufacturing setup to the new area has its own disadvantages. First of all,
people
 have to travel a lot more kilometres to reach the place and would often miss important events
such
 as in case of emergency like power cut. As, most
people
 prefer to reside in the city area because of amenities and readily available things and now, some of the employees working in certain companies have to travel by using private transportation as some routes might not have access to public buses which in turn increases their daily cost of travel.
Secondly
, it would definitely impact
people
 living in nearby
areas
 of the power plant by not only impacting the fresh air but
also
 the water bodies with a lot of pollution. Despite these disadvantages,
this
 trend offers some positive outcomes.To start, when the businesses will relocate to the non-city environment,
this
 would solve the housing
problems
 in the cities as the governing bodies can utilize that land and will be able to build more and more townhouses and apartments.
This
 will
further
 provide the shelter to average earning person and could easily solve the renting and buying
problems
 as one can afford the house at a much cheaper price.
Moreover
, in
this
 way, they can save some money on transportation by using transit buses and metro to work.
Additionally
, businesses established in rural
areas
 can
further
 alleviate the labour
problems
 by employing the
people
 available in nearby
set up
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areas
.
To conclude
,
although
this
 approach has certain pros and cons
this
 strategy will certainly help in community living in both the countryside and urban
areas
. In turn, helping the government to make the country more developed and prosperous.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban congestion
  • Economic spillover
  • Population density
  • Infrastructure development
  • Rural areas
  • Quality of life
  • Commuting challenges
  • Job dissatisfaction
  • Significant investment
  • Uneven development
  • Business-centric
  • Housing crisis
  • Transport issues
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