Lower prevalence and greater severity of asthma in hot and dry climates

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Asthma
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is
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inflammatory and chronic
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disease,
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very common in children and teenagers. There has characterized with cough and shortness breathe. It is
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ery common whole the world and the
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factors,
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air
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, there has been considered a great trigger for a appear
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disease.
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, there is
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igh prevalence in regions where the
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is more
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than
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egion where the
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is more hot and dry, but there
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more severity cases in dry regions than other
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regions.
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characteristic can be
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elation with
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roliferation of mites, that can´t
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ry environment, mites that are
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great causers
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asthma
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at dry region there are
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disease,
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as pollens, air pollution, little particles in the soil, animal skins and mites created by
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machines in the houses. At
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this
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regions where the climates
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dry and hot, there are several cases of
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asthma
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, the children that live at the places, have been suffered
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asthma
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symptoms. According
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a huge study done at Petrolina in 2007, approached that
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most children show difficult to do
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hysic class or going to school when are
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symptoms,
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compared with other regions more
humidity
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. There is a great discussion about
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allergenic factor
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caused these symptoms. In conclusion, unfortunately, is impossible
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hange the
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and refuse pollens or other allergenic particles.
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,
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the government don´t do anything about politic publics or treatment
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for
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, the situation will keep worrisome and who suffer will be always the children.

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