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Success is often associated with the achievement of the wealth, position, honours, or fame that have come about through hard work. Is success in life earned or do people succeed just because they are lucky?

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As everybody knows that prosperity comes by doing hard struggle.A successful person can be accomplished to wealth,positions and popularity in his
life
 by doing potential efforts.To earn the success
one
 needs to do hard
work
 and passion towards his
work
.There are very fewer chances who become successful due to luckiness.
This
 essay will examine the statement in the following writing. To commence with, there is no easy way to get the achievement into
life
 unless the person is lucky.
First
 of all, to get a good position in the job industry
one
 has to do a good performance.Success factors are connected to each other.
For example
, an individual who starts from the beginning level will go up by showing the
work
 performance and loyaityness respectively.There is no chance to get a direct higher promotion in the organization with a certain period of time.Unless the person is educated or well experienced it's hard to earn the achievement.
Moreover
,there are some other ways by which
one
 can achieve a big target in his
life
.
For instance
,some people do not want to spend too much time to get promoted in order to reach the managerial level. They like to spend much time on their study and passed the government exams and directly gets the managerial level position.So it's hard to say that without doing the efforts
one
 can achieve wealth and honours.There are many people who are supported by their family,can get good jobs easily by putting the reference. To conclude,
although
 having a luckiness is a different thing but the appropriate way to achieve the targets of
life
 is a hard job due to
one
 can earn anything
such
 as good positions ,wealth and honours.So that I recommend to everyone's belief in your self and do the hard
work
 ,without thinking about short ways to get success.
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