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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

#supermarkets #food #country #imports
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Agriculture is a very important sector of the
world
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. Human civilisation started after the invention of the agricultural profession.
Food
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 comes under basic needs for instant, water, clothing and shelter. Human started agriculture from 3000 years ago. Riverbanks areas like India, China & Iraq are the
first
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 who taught agriculture to the
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. The process of human socialisation started after
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nvention of agriculture. Today every
country
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 has aa good amount of supermarkets to sell
food
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 products. Humans have a long history of selling
food
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 products. If supermarkets only sell
food
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 produced from within their own
country
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 rather than import from overseas in that case that
world
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 will be restricted in various manners,
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, Potato, Tomato was only
initially
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 produced by Spain but due to transport and supermarkets
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everybody can now use it in their regular diet. Another example is Tea which is discovered by Chinese farmers, today almost every
country
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 in the
world
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 has availability of tea due to supermarkets. It gives you the best of all
food
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 products available in the
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. People can taste
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ariety of things which are available in different countries. In the other words, people now taste distinct
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 cultures.
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 availability of a variety of products from distinct countries in the supermarkets makes local farmers life more stressful because of the availability of similar products at low cost from a different
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. Supermarkets owners always prefer good quality lower-cost
food
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 products.
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, In my opinion, supermarkets should not only sell
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 produced from within their own
country
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