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In some cities people can build and design homes and office buildings however they like. This is preferable to having strict controls over the design and construction of housing and office buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly thought that having controls over an office or a housing building appeals
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its owner.
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ense of belonging, I think that it may end up with unplanned buildings in a city plan. On the one hand, by designing or building constructions people want to find peace in their own houses, while companies want to provide the best working environment to their employees. These circumstances lead to people
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 sense of belonging when they are in their whereabouts. Indeed, there have been some recorded instances about
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roductivity of workers having a relationship with office’s decorations and providing services by their office buildings(a sports
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, a car park etc.), that the workers feel motivated themselves while they are at work.
On the other hand
, different building designs in a city causes
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tremendous visual pollution. If everyone only
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 their pleasures when constructing a building, they should accept to see
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 not seeming like their homes or offices.
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, constructing a fifteen-storey building near residentials in a district due to a company’s needs
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 leads to unplanned urbanization.
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, it should be given permission with certain limits to build their own houses or offices to firms or individuals in cities. In conclusion,
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even though
 building homes or offices how their owners desire according to their pleasures or needs can create the sense of belonging and
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 work environment, it should be involved some boundaries due to entireness of a city plan.
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