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Historical objects should be brought back their country of origin. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#objects #country #origin
The thing which has
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extra ordinary
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 value in history ought to return in their
birth place
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.
This
 carries
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ation’s representations .
This
 essay will argue about the returns of historical objects. There is a rule in every
country
 which is if
any one
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 born in a
country
 , he will be the get citizen of
this
country
.
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if anything was made by a
country
 , that
have
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stay
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on
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 that
country
 .
For example
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kohinur
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Kohinoor
 diamond was
first
 found in
india
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 ,
therefore
 it should be in
india
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 .Indeed is it happened ? Though
this
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rules
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is not exists
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 in
r
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eal world, it’s necessary to
changed
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. Opposite that , Conquer a city or
country
 by other nation means that they are the owner of that
country
 . According to
this
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they can take anything .
For example
 , In
british
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 and France museum
have
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 many
thing
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 which was collected from
d
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ifferent
country
 at
t
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ime of colony government . people who disagree with
this
 argument they believe
this
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 thoughts. In conclusion,
this
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c
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aptured
country
 should send back the staffs to
m
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ain origin .
Submitted by Arifur Rahman Barno   on

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