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Some people think that children would benefit if they attend nursery school before primary school while some people think that children should stay all day with their families. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nuresry
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Nursery
school
 is an important primary
school
 for kids to learn the basic things at an early stage. According to the survey kids who attend the primary
school
 are well mannered when compared to the kids who stay all day with the families. According to my point of view, kids should be sent to
nursery
 schools to enhance their skills right from the starting of their education. At
first
, the
govrenment
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government
 should implement a rule saying that " All the kids should be sent to the
nursery
school
 before the primary
school
". Because
,
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 kids of
this
 generation are considered as the future of tomorrow's world. If the kids are habituated in going to
nursery
school
, they don't get scared of attending primary
school
, as they are already used
of
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 attending the
school
.
Besides
, the teachers can get to know about the
students
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 interest and what they are capable of.
Secondly
, kids spending all day with families is not correct according to be. Because
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 kids even need to learn things at the starting age of their life. If kids are sent to
nursery
school
, they will be trained
specially
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 how to respect others and how to behave. Moulding kids according to the community and today's world is very easy.
For instance
, if the kids of
this
 generation are sent to
nursery
school
 at
first
 and
then
 to the primary
school
, they are already aware of morals and ethics which helps them to communicate with the other person easily.
Where as
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, if the kids are directly sent to primary
school
 they might be scared of looking at the new people around them. Which
inturn
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 develops a fear in them and developing fear at
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 very young age is
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anger for the kids.
Thus
 I would conclude
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saying that, kids should always be sent to the
nursery
school
 where they can learn new things and spend some quality time with new people around them.
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, it helps to
develope
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develop
 their area of interest by the time
the
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go to
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 primary
school
 which itself mean that they already have a vision about their life, which helps them to succeed in
thier
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their
 life at the very early stages.
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