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In some countries, married couples plan to have a baby at a later age due to the demands of their professional career. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of it and give your opinion.

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Regarding imbalance in the work-life can have huge repercussions on the employees' both personal and professional life.
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 of all, neither they get chance to participate
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various functions at home or
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oved one when they require.
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 high probability to irrupt
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ouple,
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, even, end up in divorce.
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, in India, one of the most significant reasons for family problems is poor bonding due to
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usy working schedule. These issues can badly impact on professional life as well.
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, the above-mentioned hurdles can be effectively managed if the government implements strict employment laws which ensure the work-life balance.
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 of all, the company should not expect their staff connected to them throughout day and night, which means out of working hours, neither they are contacted
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 forced to do overtime, without their prior permission.
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, if the staff are asked to work extra time, they should be
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compensated
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 to appreciate since they sacrifice family time for the betterment of the firm.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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