Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at schools others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time .Dissuse both views and give your opinion.

In recent decades, the world has become more connected
due to
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in communication technology. Some educationist has put their proposal to
take
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make
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international
news
as
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a
subject
in schools.
However
, others consider it an unfruitful action.
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essay will not only
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while
concluding
this
. Commencing with , there are
myraid
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myriad
benefits of taking world
news
as a
subject
in schools. One of them is
improvement
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the improvement
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of their general knowledge. In order to get information at
global
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a global
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level when students take world
news
as
mandatory
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subject
, it not only
boost
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their knowledge but
also
give
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them significant details about
whole
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the whole
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earth.
Apart from
this
,
although
, understanding
of
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international
news
has been seen
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as difficult
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for young minds , it is an encouraging factor which would
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to youth
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they
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take
parts
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in global competition.
For instance
, sports
news
, until they learn
these
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news
in
details
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they will not
broden
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broaden
their horizon.
On the other hand
, some drawbacks of
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views
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could not
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be neglected which may bring by international
news
major demerit is
imapact
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impact
on their major
subject
because they have to divert extra time for
this
subject
which will be examined
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.
In addition
, in spite of proper guidance pupils would face difficulty
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in acknowledging
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this
subject
due to
diverse information. Rather than enhancing their interpersonal
skills
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it
have
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detrimental effects on
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the emotions
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of adolescents. In conclusion, giving children
a
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mandatory exposure
is
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always
give
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gives
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them motivation for healthy discussion.
Whereas
, I
opion
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opinion
that maintaining the
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current
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curriculum is more important.
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