Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Wildlife is a significant part of our ecosystem,
however
as technology Linking Words
progressed
, many of Wrong verb form
progresses
such
habitats are lost or destroyed. Linking Words
While
some Linking Words
people
argue that all wild species should be protected, others think that only a few should be prioritized. I concur Use synonyms
to
the former thought, because every living creature is important, and it is our responsibility to preserve them. In Change preposition
with
this
essay, we shall discuss these two topics Linking Words
further
.
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Firstly
, every living being deserves to live peacefully, and Linking Words
hence
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people
ought to preserve all wild species. Use synonyms
This
is because they benefit both us and the environment; Linking Words
for example
, the hippos even though their size and appearance seem intimidating Linking Words
they
contribute immensely to the water supply of the forest by forming tributaries or pathways for rivers to return to the forest. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Moreover
, Linking Words
the
largest living creature to the smallest everyone contributes to our ecosystem Change preposition
from the
one
way or another. Change preposition
in one
Secondly
, many forests and lands have been consumed by humans over time for agriculture or development. Linking Words
Hence
, it indirectly falls on our Linking Words
shoulder
to provide shelter to the displaced animals. Fix the agreement mistake
shoulders
As a result
, Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
urge
to assist and preserve every animal.
Wrong verb form
are urged
On the contrary
, some believe that a limited amount of creatures should be saved. Linking Words
This
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due
to the fact Add a missing verb
is due
the
animal preservation is expensive and time-consuming, Correct your spelling
that
instead
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people
should spend on other resources Use synonyms
such
as education, health or technology. Linking Words
Furthermore
, it is practically impossible to sustain every wild animal and there are various problems around the corner; Linking Words
for instance
, economies and health sectors are falling down tremendously worldwide, and countries should spruce these aspects in order to create a better livelihood for everyone. Linking Words
Consequently
, individuals think that only a selected number of creatures should be prioritized.
To summarize, there are two sides to an argument; Linking Words
therefore
, Linking Words
although
the opinion of saving some animals seems plausible, I opine that as Linking Words
a
human Correct article usage
apply
Fix the agreement mistake
beings
being
we all ought to protect all wild animals. Add a comma
being,
Nevertheless
, wildlife plays a pivotal role in our planet’s well-being.Linking Words
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