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Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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Nowadays homelessness is rising in many big cities,
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 is one of the serious issues, because the rate of homeless people is growing significantly. In
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 essay I will discuss the causes of
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 problem and possible solutions. To start with, these days with rapid growth in technology, there is more competition and more requirements in the job than in the old days.
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, it is hard for the older generation to compete with the present, more highly educated and young generation.
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 is one of the reasons for homelessness mostly in developed cities.
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, the person who has been working in the same job for many years will have more experience, but lack of new skills, which a new educated and young person can do.
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, even if he doesn't have the experience, he might have technical skills that can do the same work quickly and with more efficiently. Some possible solutions to
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 problem are providing all the employees with education and training to keep up with developed technology.
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, as taxes are now higher, a minimum increase in the salary will be helpful to motivate people and
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 will
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 reduce the number of homeless people. In conclusion, people should educate the old generation so they are not left behind and they should motivate or reward them.
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