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Now the machines are very complex and a lots of work is automated. Does this machines automation have more pros than ons.

#machines #lots #work #automation #ons
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igration of people in millions from
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ural area to
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rban area in Iran, Indonesia and Russia, from 2000 to 2020 and how they will change in the future. In 2000, around 10
million
 people in Iran and Indonesia moved to cities from villages, whereas , about 15
million
 citizens migrated for the same in Russia.
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 movement to urban places rose steadily in Indonesia to 30
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ame till 2025.
On the other hand
, migrating people in Iran rose steeply with some fluctuations, to 80
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it will be approximately 90
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, in 2025.
Similarly
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 rose up by five times to reach about 75
million
, in 2020, from 15
million
 in 2000 and will be little less than 90
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ountryside to towns;
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ise in numbers, while, Indonesia it is expected to remain same as in 2020.
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