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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It has been said that computers are the most prominent breakthrough of the century. I opine that
although
 computers bring immense benefits to society, it has some darker sides too. To commence with, there are manifold advantages of computers.
First
 and foremost, it has reduced human efforts. In past, people used to work manually before the invention of the computers. Now, it helps them in order to do most of the work and reduce their efforts dramatically.
As a result
, the majority of the paperwork replaced with electronic devices.
In addition
 to
this
, owing to its capacity of storing
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arge amount of data, individuals do need to keep the papers with them.
Consequently
, they do not require large space to store
this
 information
instead
 they store thousands of records in one small gadget and because of that the issues of loss of data
also
 decreased. It is
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ad but bitter truth that computes bring some negative aspects as well. these devices are
also
 used
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 as a mode of entertainment and because of that masses glued to it. That being reason, people become lazy and prey of different health issues
such
 as obesity, high blood pressure and diabetes. In
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ecent article, the number of youngsters who have eye problems allegedly has been increasing because of sitting longer in front of computers in
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ast decade.
Besides
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, the public
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 isolated due to it and as a consequence the lose their physical fitness. To conclude, I personally believe that despite having various benefits of computers, it has some downsides too which we should not ignore the growth of the individuals and the nation as a whole.
Submitted by Neel Patel on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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