Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Under the effect of innovative measures immersing into traditional teaching skills and methods, it is obvious to be a controversial topic these days. Some individuals, especially parents and educators believe that the
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as interactive lessons or
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activities, should remain the most significant issue or
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in schools.
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, I personally agree that it would be better to focus the vital
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of education on academic results and
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essay will explore these issues, using examples from some recent studies carried out by the universities to demonstrate points and support arguments. One strong
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that school children can learn more effectively when they are in an enjoyable and relaxing learning atmosphere. The fact
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that the human brain will easily absorb and retain new knowledge for a longer time
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if the acquiring knowledge process is full of exciting and stimulating activities rather than those who may be thought of as boring or unmotivating.
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, children can not only receive some new ideas of academic information but
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having enjoyment in their classrooms will initiate self-encouragement during the moment of acquiring knowledge. It has been shown that children who learn through more engaging activities usually achieve high grades more easily. Despite the aforementioned supporting ideas of using creative teaching
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in the academic curriculum, it is difficult for school children to manage multitude during the class lessons and school students often lack the ability to distinguish between playing
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and learning a new lesson of educational information.
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, they are very likely to lose their concentration on the topic of
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ecture and cannot identify or select the main point from the authentic issues.
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, a recent study from the United Nation indicates that a group of students had a poor and unacceptable language test results when a teacher had been using a new teaching
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with a high level of
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rrelevant or distracting
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of entertainment. It could be suggested that teachers should not put the innovative elements of
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into all academic subjects. To conclude,
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there are good reasons for academic institutions to educate pupils with
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, I believe that schools should retain the
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educational
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in their academic circles.
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