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school children are using computers in school more than ever. Discuss the advantages and disadvantage and give your opinions

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Computers have revolutionized the entire world.It is believed by people that these days
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omputer is used more in schools as compared to an earlier time because
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the availability of these at each and every school.In my perspective,computers have various merits as well as demerits and my viewpoints on
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 it has made them active and they can do whatever they want to do on that especially they can make assignments on it.
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,these days due to coronavirus children can not go to schools ,so they are doing their work on the computer which has made their life more convenient as compared to ancient time.
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.usuage of computers have affected the eyesight of children and they are facing the problem of obesity and
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roblem of less eyesight.Children have become an addict of it they can not live without it. To recapitulate, I would like to write that it is not computers have pros as well as cons.
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