It is often said that the governaments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that every year the governments spend a significant amount of
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on projects that aim at environmental protection, whereas, other important problems are known as well, the hardest part is to discover what is the best choice for spending
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on a solution. I completely disagree with
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statement and I will support my view with examples. Nowadays, we are in face of a lot of challenges when we are thinking about fauna protection and how we can improve that.
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of all, having actions that result in more preservation of species of animals, especially the most endangered, can directly affect the maintenance of the
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chain and it has a straightforward impact on human life,
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, the large-scale fishing on the ocean is causing the complete extinction of some species of fish and in the future, all the
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chain will suffer the consequence of
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action. Aiming only the profit, owners of fishes farms are increasing the creations areas out of the ocean, and
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of the exacerbate fishing, there is a variety of fish that just can be found there.
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, if we put
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on other problems,
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of giving the due importance and financial investments on the right purpose,
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as the wildlife maintenance, we will experience other consequences of
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, in the future, we will have fewer options of available
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, the complete extinction of some species, and the total imbalance of the
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chain. In conclusion, we need to be aware of all types of problems,
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, if we do not keep in mind the size of the problem that animal extinction can cause in our society whether we put
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in the wrong question
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as other problems, we will experience an even huge problem that other problems can cause.
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