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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree?

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It is commonly believed that tourist should
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 and adapt the local
culture
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, norms, values and practices. I totally agree with the statement, as a matter of fact, it will show
respect
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 to locals, easy to adjust in-crowd and might save you from getting penalized by the lawmakers. To start with
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 for local
culture
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 and customs.
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, In the UAE we cannot wear western dresses in public and
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ame in France, one cannot wear the veil, which is mostly being worn by Muslim women.
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, by wearing appropriate clothing and according to their rules,
culture
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, local practice.
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 as fully covered clothing in the United Arab Emirates is kind of showing
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 to them and it helps you to adjust in the crowd with the native people.
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most of the countries have strict law and you must obey it in order to make your trip hassle-free. As an example, in the Middle East countries, an unmarried couple cannot stay together in a room or house, whereas in Europe married or unmarried couple can stay together. So, when you are travelling you need to follow the rules, regulations and adapt the local practices. Conclusion, Adapting the different
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 and following local practices of the country to be visited is good. It helps you from hefty fines
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 and going against the law. Along with that,it shows
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 to residents and that territory and you get it back in the same way.
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