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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the Internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In today's contemporary world, almost everything has gone online, including shopping, work and communication processes. I think
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 change will have a positive impact both on our life and economy as we will be able to task in a blended way while having a work-life balance. Nowadays the internet has made it feasible to avoid the hustle to visit the shopping mall and to shop online, while sitting idly on the couch, enjoying the setting sun from the balcony, or while playing with the toddler. These are nothing but the examples, how online shopping has made life more comfortable while maintaining work-life balance.
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 obtained by organisations to raise the productivity of the employees by relieving stress.
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 type of flexible measures, with the help of the internet, which is now followed by other companies.
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, the communication system has become far more accessible than before due to the internet. Now, we can have a video chat from any part of the world, which has a tremendous impact in both personal and business world, as traders can do business deal online without any type face-to-face contact.
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, along with the positive effects, going online has some detrimental impacts as well.
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, retail shops are losing customers for raising online buyers.
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, interpersonal relationship hampered to some extent for going online and not having physical meetings. In conclusion, I believe, though going online has some adverse effects, the merits of it are broader, to make life more relaxed in sectors like shopping, chatting with others or having flexibility at work.
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