It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mixed with each other at schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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as the
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learning place for most of the people. Some people suggest that it would be very beneficial if children from diverse cultures with individual talents and skills study together in schools. I
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with
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trend. To commence with, when children will sit together and share their ideas,
this
would enhance their thinking and learning skills.
this
could be possible in many ways. the activities like group assignments and projects will provide the children with great opportunity to showcase their skills and talents. Students would get to know the other's views and opinions.
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share
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ommon interest in a stream
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tory writing,
then
they can share each other's ideas and can nourish and improve their skills in story writing.
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educational institutions are inclusive of diverse cultures. they will explore more about various family backgrounds in
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society. Children would be more respectful towards
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cultural values and beliefs. Schools can organise multicultural events to promote diversity among children. They will not find it difficult to adjust the environment
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if they work in
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diverse environment in the future. From the
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ideas, I can conclude that it is
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ery positive idea to ensure that children with various talents and from different social backgrounds study together in the schools.
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