Every year, an increasing number of people suffer from fast food related diseases. The government, therefore, should impose a high tax on fast food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In different parts of the world, it is reported that there is a constant rise in the number of cases related to fast
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I am of the opinion that the government should issue a heavy
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on
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type of
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, I
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argue that other options could be taken to deal with
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situation. On the one hand,
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restaurant chains have to pay a higher
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compared to other businesses. The first reason is that
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is considered an effective approach to control the establishment of fast
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stores. Specifically, a higher
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payment means that fast
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owners are unlikely to earn much profit from their businesses.
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, governments can use the amount of money collected to fund
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care system as
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compensation to those suffering from fast
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food related
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diseases, which could help reduce
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burden when they are in hospital.
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, there are other alternatives that could be taken into account. One possible solution is that governments are advised to organise health campaigns to raise people’s awareness of the negative impacts that fast
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may cause.
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, the high volume of sugar, salt and fat in French fries, hamburgers or fried chicken will probably lead to high cholesterol or even diabetes. More importantly, there should be strict rules and regulations on
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manufacturing in order to ensure the origin of ingredients
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approved nutrients before reaching customers. In conclusion,
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to changing
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policy, it is necessary for governments to draw the attention of customers and put fast
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restaurants under control to protect
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public health.

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