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WITHOUT CAPITAL PUNISHMENT (THE DEATH PENALTY) OUR LIVES ARE LESS SECURE AND CRIMES OF VIOLENCE INCREASE. CAPITAL PUNISHMENT IS ESSENTIAL TO CONTROL VIOLENCE IN SOCIETY. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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Perhaps crime has been considered one of the most crucial issues these days. It is commonly believed that capital punishment plays a vital role in controlling violence in
society
. As far as I am concerned, I am totally in
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 of
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 point of view.
Therefore
, the objective of
this
 essay is to give possible reasons to prove my belief. We should
first
 recognize that
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eath penalty is similar to a deterrent to potential offenders. The reason is that
this
 helps to raise people’s consciousness of severe consequences they might have to suffer if they tend to commit violent offences.
This
 type of punishment is regarded as the principle of an eye for an eye.
As a result
, brutal criminals will not have a
second
 chance to start their lives over again. Another point worth mentioning is that our
society
 is going to start out in a chaotic and disordered state provided that death sentences are not implemented. In my point of view, savage offenders will be one of the leading factors that contribute to the emergence of
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bloodthirsty
society
 among humans in the near future.
Consequently
, it is predicted that
this
 will pose a threat to our security when we live in
such
 a cruel life. In conclusion, I still hold my belief that the government has to take account of the issue of capital punishment in order to not only limit the growth in violent crime but
also
 bring the peace to the entire
society
 based on the grounds mentioned above.
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