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SOME SCHOOL LEAVERS TEND TO GO TRAVELLING OR WORK A PERIOD OF TIME BEFORE GOING TO UNIVERSITY. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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contemporary society. The fact that students prefer to take gap years after high school to work or travel is regarded as a double-sided issue.
Therefore
, the objective of
this
 essay is to analyze both advantages and disadvantages of
this
 trend. On the one hand, there is no doubt that travelling or working can bring students certain benefits.
To begin
 with,
this
 gives them an opportunity to broaden their horizons. When they go travelling, they are able to discover mysterious things that they have not been taught at school. More importantly, they can sharpen their life skills, namely communication skills and problem-solving skills which are essential to help them survive challenging situations in
this
 complicated society. Another useful point is that working enables students to gain priceless experience from
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orking process, they will have a chance to challenge themselves in a variety of jobs so that they can pursue the most suitable one for their future career.
On the other hand
, there are a number of considerable drawbacks. The
first
 problem is that they might lose motivation for study after a period of working due to the fact that they can make a living independently without
further
 education.
In addition
, students have to deal with challenges to possess a well-paid job in the future. Owing to the development of society in different aspects of life, job recruiters always seek for potential applicants with not only specialist knowledge but
also
 higher qualifications.
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ack of the university degree has a negative effect on students’ job prospects provided that they want to get promoted. In conclusion, nothing is purely advantageous or disadvantageous. For
this
 reason, students who want to travel or work before entering university should take two opposite sides of the issue into account before making their decision. (311 words)
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